|2002/11/27 00:07:21 PST by Black Squall [0/5]
Edited at 2002/11/29 10:49:05 PST
Well Nix, I hope you can take constructive critisism well. Each part has a very nice feel to it, in it's own respect. However, it felt very rushed and because of that in several places it kind of jumbled together.
I didn't think it was bad but you over used disonence, like bond said kind of messy. To help correct this take, I beleive it was the 3rd or 4th note of the repeating base set and raise or lower it half a step. That should help clean some of it up a little.
Towards the end, I think they're supposed to be bells but with a midi it can be hard to tell. Either way, they sound very fast, and cuase some more jumbling between other parts that have archipolegio's (sp?) going in the opposite direction. Slow that part down to maybe half notes or dotted half notes. Maybe try to romove some of the steps in their too.
The peice does have some very well written parts inside of it. I don't know whether it was the streaming over the net that cuased it to sound jumbled and rushed or the compiling or something somewhere in the middle of it all. Over all a few minor changes and this could be a brilliant peice.
I didn't want this to sound mean or harsh in any way, but from the quality I got (granted it is midi and streamed) the peice just felt like each part had their own tempo.
EDIT: As I listened to it again, problem in the beggining came when you changed the key of what apears to sound like a pipe organ. Change it back to it was in the first few bars and it should stay clean for awhile.
EDIT: Instruments can change alot of things, but yeah, there may be less jumbling in a better sound quality.