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[project] Proofread this site
2005/10/17 22:43:12 PDT by Temporal [manager]
Edited at 2005/10/17 22:43:45 PDT
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Eh... It's ok. I do appreciate the work you put in... just try to be a little less pedantic. :) The goal is to eliminate clear errors rather than rewrite the site.

2005/10/18 04:28:59 PDT by Davy boy2000b [0/13]
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"Brooke still likes having fun and dirty."
And dirty what..? This doesn't make sense.

Have we confirmed that Enna is indeed Drythian? There are the square brackets on her character page but not on the pages explaining the races.

I'm not entirely sure but wasn't TW short for Techno-Wizard? If it is then this page needs updating. TW no longer exists in place of Eumonetics. Or at least that's how I remember it.

That's the characters proof-read in depth. The locations are next. I'll get cracking on those tonight after I go see my sick girlfriend =(

Added at 2005/10/19 09:39:55 PDT


There! =P this is what happens when you drink a litre of Stella ( 5.2% Vol ) and try typing URLs from memory in the earlly hours of the morning.. bluig.....

2005/10/18 23:46:07 PDT by Temporal [manager]
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Three good points. Your links are wrong, though. :P

2005/10/19 15:55:00 PDT by Davy boy2000b [0/13]
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Now for the setting > locations. In fact to hell with it, I'm gonna finish 'The Game' altogether tonight =)

occassionally -> occasionally

Now this is where I could be seen as getting nit-picky again but they are still errors.

Third paragraph Pylos corporation -> Pylos Corporation

Now this one is really strange. It looks fine on the web page but when I paste it all to MS Word to spell check, I get this back. Second bullet. Although theProtea ns are also known
This won’t be changed but I just thought I should bring it up. I looked at the page source but it’s typed up perfectly in there? Very strange indeed…

Second paragraph. Similarily -> similarly
Seventh paragraph dilligent -> diligent
Seventh again. The link is a 404.

mothed -> method
maneuver -> manoeuvre This is a US - UK spelling difference. I originally typed this up about an hour ago before I realised my word processor could never make it's mind up between the two in a spell check. I leave it here for the Brits that try bringing this one up in the future.

First paragraph. posesses -> possesses

weilding -> wielding

That's me done for 'The Game'. 'The Project' is next. Whilst reading through the site, I have come across a few plot holes which I have made brief notes about. I shall research them a little and bare them in mind as I read through the plot someday. I hope to bring them up soon for discussion, debate, dispute, disregard and general ironing out.

Added at 2005/10/19 16:00:04 PDT

ATTEMPTED EDIT: Similarily -> Similarly
(Still keeping that capitilization. Very important I be accurate!)

Added at 2005/10/19 17:54:51 PDT

Proof reading for 'The Project' is done for me. No issues at all. All that's left for this task as far as I'm concerned is monitoring for site edits and checking them as they happen.

I would like to say something to others wanting to raise awareness of a potential error or typo. If you think there is one, don't be put off by the amount of checking already done by other members. It's probably because we missed it so let Dev and Temp know of it. Human error, after all...

2005/11/19 13:06:22 PST by BioKupo [0/0]

you have WAY too much time on your hands davy :p

2005/11/19 16:31:00 PST by bond4154 [0/10]
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Game > Plot > Part 4 > Chapter 25 > 7 > d

It reads: He explains that Kydran is allowing his righteous pride to blide him, and his overwhelming regrets have driven him almost to the point of insanity.

"Blide" should be turned into "blind".

2005/12/10 17:03:25 PST by TerraTwilight [0/1]
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Hello everyone!

I noticed, under "The Game > Setting > Science & Technology > Eumonetics > Elements", that:

The second sentence of the second paragraph reads, "Thing of this sort of like electric charge."

It should read, "ThinK of this sort of like electric charge."

I think I might have noticed another mistake after that, but I forgot what or where it was.

By the way, absolutely brilliant conceptualization there in that "Eumonetics" section as a whole. Beyond description. Takes my breath away, really. I mean that.


2006/02/26 01:24:37 PST by Pretense [0/0]

Home > The Game > Setting > Races > Antareans --> final paragraph

"...only a small fraction of Antareans does not have eumonetic abilities."

could be:

"...only a small fraction of Antareans do not have eumonetic abilities."

TBH, I can't decide if the first is incorrect grammar or not...but I like the second way better.

Oh yeah, and I'm new. What a perfect opportunity to get off on the wrong foot! :)

2006/10/16 12:56:57 PDT by Davy boy2000b [0/13]
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I notice my second lot of corrections aren't made, yet everyone else's is?

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